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I need to chew on this some more. The dialogue(s) is wonderful. Each player has a distinct voice and accompanying mannerism to root them.

I might be having trouble with the visuals. I happen to be familiar with the portrayed region so I know for instance what color a blooming wisteria is. Shapes are described very well. Clusters of shapes (alcove) are equally well-assembled.

It may be a matter of color and hue. And it may be a matter of my own sensibility. I am going to locate a similar sample of my writing for comparison. It may be that because I know your theater the colors come to me automatically. But what if this scene was in Vermont (a place I do not know intimately)? Could I "see" the roof, the leaves, the gravel and other components? Does it even matter?

What I would propose to do is a submission of my own writing from a similar region. I can hit you with North Carolina or Virginia. I wonder if (we) the author(s) visualize the color and hue and shape so intimately that we overlook a reader who is not so familiar with the regional aspects of wisteria versus Spanish Moss or honeysuckle.

'A tulip is a tulip but what color is the tulip or does it even matter?'

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